Is This Email to a Potential Show Host Too Pushy?

[smilesarepriceless]

Do you think this email sounds ok --I've tried calling this customer Several times...(no returned call...and now I just sent her this email)...

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Hello Sandra,

I hope you are having a great day.

I've tried contacting you a few times via phone and we haven't been able to connect. I'm very excited to help you in having your own fun Pampered Chef cooking show and have scheduled your show on my calendar to work for the date of April THUR 10th!

It would be most helpful for me to hear back from you so we can begin the planning process to help the show be as successful as possible, and for me to secure the date for your show.

If I don't hear from you in a week's time ( by next Tuesday), I won't be able to know for certain that we're on for your show, so if you could simply reply or give me a call, I would really appreciate it. Otherwise, I'll open that date as a slot for another potential show, as this is my business and I'm just trying to keep my calendar and works schedule flowing.

Warmly,

Heather Heuman

 

[Tropicalburstqt2]

Sounds good to me!! Best of luck & I hope she replies.

 

[leftymac]

Do you think this email sounds ok --I've tried calling this customer Several times...(no returned call...and now I just sent her this email)...

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Hello Sandra,

I hope you are having a great day.

I've tried contacting you a few times via phone and we haven't been able to connect. I'm very excited to help you in having your own fun Pampered Chef cooking show and have scheduled your show on my calendar to work for the date of April THUR 10th!

It would be most helpful for me to hear back from you so we can begin the planning process to help the show be as successful as possible, and for me to secure the date for your show.

If I don't hear from you in a week's time ( by next Tuesday), I won't be able to know for certain that we're on for your show, so if you could simply reply or give me a call, I would really appreciate it. Otherwise, I'll open that date as a slot for another potential show, as this is my business and I'm just trying to keep my calendar and works schedule flowing.

Warmly,

Heather Heuman

Something about the "this is my business" line would rub me the wrong way. I would simply say that you'll reserve that date for another show. Pressure her into thinking you've got lots of bookings and dates are in limited supply! But then again, what do I know? My first show is this weekend!

 

[heather223]

Do you think this email sounds ok --I've tried calling this customer Several times...(no returned call...and now I just sent her this email)...

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Hello Sandra,

I hope you are having a great day.

I've tried contacting you a few times via phone and we haven't been able to connect. I'm very excited to help you in having your own fun Pampered Chef cooking show and have scheduled your show on my calendar to work for the date of April THUR 10th!

It would be most helpful for me to hear back from you so we can begin the planning process to help the show be as successful as possible, and for me to secure the date for your show.

If I don't hear from you in a week's time ( by next Tuesday), I won't be able to know for certain that we're on for your show, so if you could simply reply or give me a call, I would really appreciate it. Otherwise, I'll open that date as a slot for another potential show, as this is my business and I'm just trying to keep my calendar and works schedule flowing.

Warmly,

Heather Heuman

I would change works schedule to work, but otherwise it looks good to me.

 

[Kodeysmom]

Something about the "this is my business" line would rub me the wrong way. I would simply say that you'll reserve that date for another show. Pressure her into thinking you've got lots of bookings and dates are in limited supply! But then again, what do I know? My first show is this weekend!

Maybe even if you worded it as "my job" or something instead of business.